Product Description Summary (Draft 1)


BlueSG is Singapore's 100% electric self-service car sharing operator which provides environmentally-friendly Electric Vehicles (EV). They offer point-to-point service and can be returned at any of their stations located islandwide, where the parking lots can be reserved in advance through the app. The key functionality of this service is the operation of Lithium Metal Polymer (LMP) which does not contribute to environmental pollution and consumes zero petrol or diesel.

 The EVs have an on-board computer that transmits information about the vehicle, interfaces with the BlueSG operating system for navigation which has the ability to track the locations of the cars including the charging points and parking lots. This function not only enhances usability but also enables BlueSG personnels to identify the cars immediately should there be any accident or emergency occurrences which in turn acts as a measure for maintenance and identify users who misuse the EVs.

Packed with high-tech features, users are able to drive conveniently. As the first electric car sharing service in Singapore, BlueSG is environmentally-friendly as compared to other car sharing operators, due to its ability to let users drive worry-free about the excess mileage and hence, BlueSG should be users' primary choice in car sharing.



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  1. JunSeptember 25, 2019 at 7:57 PM

    Dear Quan,

    Thank you for your detailed and concise summary on BlueSG. We feel that your content was very clear and well-organised, however there are a few points that we would like to touch on.

    Firstly, you mentioned "The key functionality of this service is the operation of Lithium Metal Polymer (LMP)" however we felt that while this is one of the functions that BlueSG provides, but its not the key function of this car sharing system.

    In addition, you mentioned " BlueSG personnels" however personnel is already in plural form. You can refer to (https://www.wordhippo.com/what-is/the-plural-of/personnel.html) to learn more about it.

    Next, you wrote "ability to track the locations of the cars including the charging points and parking lots" , however there should be a comma after locations of the cars, since "including the charging points and parking lots" is additional information.

    Also, "Packed with high-tech features, users are able to drive conveniently" is a slightly awkward sentence as there's no direct link between the high-tech features and driving conveniently. Perhaps you could establish the link by explaining how these features make the driving experience more convenient.

    Furthermore, "BlueSG is environmentally-friendly as compared to other car sharing operators" can be written as BlueSG is environmentally-friendl(ier) than other car sharing operators to make your summary more concise.

    Lastly, we feel that the last sentence in your summary lacks logical flow.
    " As the first electric car sharing service in Singapore, BlueSG is environmentally-friendly as compared to other car sharing operators, due to its ability to let users drive worry-free about the excess mileage"
    > how does being environmentally friendlier allow users to drive worry-free about the excess mileage? environment or cost concerns?
    "As the first electric car sharing service in Singapore, BlueSG is environmentally-friendly as compared to other car sharing operators, due to its ability to let users drive worry-free about the excess mileage and hence, BlueSG should be users' primary choice in car sharing. "
    >How do all these points make BlueSG the primary choice? comparative advantage?

    On the other hand, you have good organisation and planning of your sentence structures and this makes your content easy to read and understand.

    Cheers,
    Kai Wei and Jun Hui

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    1. quannypieOctober 12, 2019 at 1:37 AM

      Dear Kai Wei and Jun Hui,

      Thank you for your constructive feedback. I will definitely work on them to improve myself. Also, do not hesitate to let me know on other areas that I may have to work on in future!


      Cheers,
      Yingquan

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